In attempting to edit using the recursive process, I attempted to edit my paper in terms of ideas and not in words. Often I found myself, like Sommers stated, just changing words around that had the same exact idea. Doing this helps to make the paper look better but it doesn’t improve the quality of the actual paper. Specifically in my paper I was attempting to hammer down the idea of what will really be affected by emerging adulthood. While this did involved changing a lot of words around, this was only for the purpose of making the points more clear and concise. I chose to change one of my paragraphs from being about how the purchases made by twenty-somethings are so expensive and that emerging adulthood will lessen the pressure. In my final draft, I made it more about how those purchases are unnecessary and are affecting the long term well-being of twenty somethings to make it much more easy to relate to. By taking my paper and relating it more to purpose, it allowed me to create much more thesis focused sentences. Meaning they were much more focused on the thesis rather than the claims I was making.
